Sit alone in solemnity
I wonder with gaze averted
The small portrait of a face no longer for this world
Smiles as you held my brother and me
Raised us, higher than the skies to where I now look
The stars dim as my dreams sit bright in the night sky from below
No questions of these hopes I had shared with you in secret
Every night we wished to see tomorrow, together
Life is not a measure of time but the distance that grows between people
Consciously immeasurable and…
Somewhat saddening
Delightful days pass in an instant
Bloom fragile and wilt dreadfully
Leaving me to wonder, what was it that I was looking for in the sky?
Was it still my dreams or hoping for signs that you were still somewhere?
© The Sad Owl
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i like your poem, Sad Owl, but one question i have for you is would you ever say “you held i?” wouldn’t you more likely say, “you held me”?
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Thank you! I’m not sure if that’s a general question or in relation to this particular piece. However here, It was “my brother and I” plural form requires and I since it wasn’t just myself. But in general you certainly would use “you held me” and not “you held I” (i.e; the way you held me, the way I held you).
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no matter the number, The Sad Owl, my understanding of grammar tells me to write, “Mother sent Tommy and me to the store” because she would never send I to the store. perhaps I was poorly schooled, but that’s the way I was taught that construction.
most people, carpenters, plumbers, professional athletes, and such, never consider these trivial matters, but poets, novelists, and journalists are called to a more precise standard. I hope you have a most pleasant day. . . j
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On a second read I realize you are correct because my brother and me were the object of the situation so you are in fact correct. I strive to better myself everyday. Thank you for that! I went ahead and corrected it. (Which I’d like to add is quite funny in hindsight because I even gave the reason for the correction myself as well when removing the party with “held me, held you” but held I wouldn’t work of course), I usually write these late at night so I’ll falsely chalk it up to that and call it a day haha. Thank again J for interjecting and helping me correct that error!
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This is so beautiful. I love your flow
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Thank you !
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Welcome 🙂
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